The Find

Dark Cave

The Find

“Holy shit!” Hannah peered at the rock in front of her and laughed. The drawings were crude and awkward, like something a child might have done. But they were there, and that meant her instincts had been right. She waggled her flashlight in her partner’s direction, “David, get over here.”

As she waited for David to pick his way over the rocks in the cave, Hannah studied the ancient drawings. They had been executed in red ochre, like so many other cave drawings, but what they depicted was unlike anything ever recorded. Hannah traced the outline of the first picture with one finger, wondering what its artist had experienced. Was he on the run? Had this prehistoric beast devoured him? Or was this a record of something he had seen, documented as a warning to future generations? She traced its fangs, done with such precision in an otherwise imprecise drawing, and felt a chill run down her spine.

“David, what’s taking so long?” Hannah called over her shoulder. The silence that greeted her brought her back to the present. She turned around, but David was gone. She pointed her flashlight into the darkness, hoping he was just playing a trick on her.

“David?” Panic began to creep into her voice. She was sure she could hear something moving in the dark. “David, if this is a joke, it’s not funny.” Silence. “Seriously. I need you to come out now.”

Hannah turned back to the crude cave drawings. The second one included a representation of the sun beaming down on the beast, and the beast appeared to be consumed by flames. The irony of this drawing being buried in the darkest depths of this cave was suddenly very apparent.

Rocks skittered in the dark behind her. Hannah shuddered and spun around, pointing her flashlight with unsteady hands. A shape charged toward her, fangs flashing, and in her few remaining moments, Hannah knew exactly what fate had befallen the prehistoric artist.


This is my submission for this week’s Trifecta writing challenge. The word this week is crude and the third definition is as follows:

3: marked by the primitive, gross, or elemental or by uncultivated simplicity or vulgarity.

Here are the rules:

  • Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.
  • You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
  • The word itself needs to be included in your response.
  • You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.
  • Only one entry per writer.
  • Trifecta is open to everyone.  Please join us.


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34 thoughts on “The Find

  1. I just visited Jeju, an island in South Korea and we specifically went for a boat ride to see the caves. I’m glad the ones I can home safe 🙂

  2. See, that’s why warnings about cave monsters need to be well outside of the cave, to shoo you off before you get eaten. Poor Hannah. C’est tragique.

  3. This is tight and the beginning was great. I’m sorry I’m so behind on commenting but I read every word you write. Thank you for my comments. You got my vote this week. This was very well done.

    Hope y’all had a great 4th

  4. Ohhhhh…spooky and creepy and of course, so good. I liked how you used the word and how you set us up for the END.

  5. Excellent! I love that you can’t tell if it’s a run of the mill Nosferatu, some kind of sparkly bastard, or maybe the creepy cave dwellers in that movie The Descent, well done 🙂

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