Trifextra: The Other Side

Tiger

The Other Side

Feisty you,
With your wild hair and your tiger’s soul.

Your death burned a hole right through me
Forced a confrontation.

Across the abyss,
Somehow, I am a better person for losing you.

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This is my submission for this weekend’s Trifextra challenge in which we had to write exactly 33 words about whatever we wanted.

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Image credit: Oleg Kozlov / Photoxpress.com

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57 thoughts on “Trifextra: The Other Side

  1. Oh how I loved this, it was written with such truth and the end, I felt tears come to my eyes.. Sometimes the death of a piece of ourselves or even the end of a relationship is the best way to rise again.

    This was brilliant and si moving.. Esp for me.

    Xo

  2. This is brilliant! In the first stanza you perfectly capture the shock of losing someone who seems so immutable, then the next two do such a good job of setting up this strange conflict in the character – and the realization at the end that’s almost grudgingly made. Is this a community vote week? Can I vote for you anyway? So good

    1. Aw, Brian! Thank you for your wonderful comment. I have a real love-hate relationship with death, which I tried to capture in 33 words. I’m really glad you liked it. 🙂

      And yes, it just happens to be a community vote this weekend! 😉

  3. Wow, Suzanne this is good. Feisty you and tiger’s soul – such awesome phrases, and then the end, her realization. These few words make you wonder what that relationship was like.

  4. Your final line struck to the core – sometimes we don’t become a fuller version of what we can be until we are forced to deal with issues that someone else may have dealt with for us, may have stunted us either purposely or not. It makes death/loss such a strange growth process in a way we don’t often care to admit. Good job of putting it out there.

    1. Thank you so much Jody. Your comments mean a lot. It’s so true. Coping with that kind of loss is definitely a growth process, if you allow it to be.

  5. Always amazed at what you do with words. You’ve captured a complete emotional response in 33 words. Impossible to pick a favorite set of words because all 33 words are my favorite.

    1. Thank you so much for commenting! I’m so sorry you are sick, and I’m amazed at your strength and openness about it. Losing someone you love is so hard, but learning to deal with death is such an important part of life.

  6. Awesome, Suzanne.
    Goes to show how the universal comes through in the details. The hole burned through and in its burning making you a better person is so devastatingly true.
    The wild hair and the tiger’s soul is the pretty part.

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