Distant Thunder

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Distant Thunder

The storm clouds rolled in while my back was turned, my attention focused on pulling weeds from the garden. The only warning was a distant rumble of thunder and the sudden electrical charge humming in the air. I glanced over my shoulder as thick black clouds obscured the sun, churning across the sky towards me.

My heart lurched and I ran to the house to find Lisa, throwing the front door open.

“Storm!” I yelled.

Lisa appeared at the top of the stairs. She looked at me, then looked over my shoulder at the ever-darkening sky. It didn’t take long for her to grasp the significance of what was happening. Her eyes widened in fear.

“But how—”

“I don’t know,” I interrupted, “but we have to go. Now.”

Lisa nodded. “I’ll get the baby.”

While Lisa gathered the sleeping infant, I went back outside and unlocked the doors to the cellars, silently praying that our escape plan was sound. I fumbled in the dark, searching for the flashlight I’d placed there when we’d arrived. As Lisa came running out the front door, baby clasped against her chest, I took one last look at our garden and the quaint house we’d called home for the last four months. Country life had been nice while it lasted. Not running had been ever nicer.

I ushered Lisa through the cellar doors, flashlight illuminating her way, then stepped in behind her and pulled the doors closed just as thunder crashed above our heads, followed by a violent pounding of rain. I recited the spell to seal the lock, hoping it would hold. I was no wizard, but Lisa’s doula had taught me a few spells to help keep us safe. So far, they’d worked.

As we ran through the maze of underground tunnels, in search of our next safe house, I wondered for the hundredth time why we had been blessed with a child who was destined to bring an end to the Old Gods.

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This is my submission for this week’s Trifecta challenge. This week, the word is grasp
and the third definition is:

 

Here are the rules:

  • Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.
  • You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
  • The word itself needs to be included in your response.
  • You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.
  • Only one entry per writer.
  • Trifecta is open to everyone. Please join us.

This week is community-judged, so be sure to read some of the other submissions, then come back and vote on Thursday evening!

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Image credit: dbvirago / Photoxpress.com

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65 thoughts on “Distant Thunder

  1. I wondered from their reactions whether the storm was more than just the average storm. Very nice twist. Poor kid, though; ending the Old Gods is rather a big destiny to handle. 🙂

  2. I really enjoyed this. You reveal things at just the right moment. The storm is described so well, it’s like I’m witnessing it for myself as I read. I also think you have an excellent premise for a novel here. Hint, hint!
    -Alicia Audrey

  3. Love the foreshadowing / symbolism of the storm and the title itself — and I’d love to read on to see what other “storms” are waiting ahead. I also want to know more about these Old Gods. Very nice!

  4. Ohhhh, you built this story up perfectly! As soon as Lisa said, “But how — ” I knew it wasn’t a natural storm, and I couldn’t wait to read what would come next. I would read more and more and more of this.

  5. I truely love this, you created a vision that kept me enthall with what would happen next and the end, Nice, never saw it coming. Good one!

  6. This would have been fine as simply a storm survival story. You did such a great job of ratcheting up the tension of the oncoming storm. But, as soon as you cast a spell well, that took the story to a whole different level. What a much bigger, greater, grander story it has the potential now to become. I hope you continue on with it.

    1. Thanks Tom! I started with the storm and the rest just kind of flowed from there. I’m filing this family in my “to be developed” folder, so I’m sure they will be back. 🙂

  7. Love this. Your description of the storm is tense and nail biting. Like others, I was thinking tornado. Your ending was a fabulous surprise.

  8. Normally I don’t like the ‘twist at the end that makes it make sense’ thing. Usually it comes off as overly precious and manipulative, but this one sort of worked for me. Still, I’d like it better if there was some subtle indication towards the beginning that we were reading a fantasy story.

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