Blizzard
I remember falling into you,
Tumbling from my place in the clouds
Adrenaline rushing
I remember thinking at the time,
It seemed like a brilliant idea
To be that free
I remember the dizzying buzz
Of being caught in your snowstorm
Like dancing light
I remember melting against you,
Mesmerized by everything you were
That I was not
I remember the day you closed the door
To shine your light on someone else
Disappearing me
I remember crawling through the darkness,
Emerging into sunlight
Beautiful and free.
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This is my submission for this week’s Speakeasy #135. You should come and read all the other fantastic submissions, then come back and vote for your three favourites on Thursday (that’s tomorrow!).
This week, we had to use the following sentence anywhere in our piece: At the time,
it seemed like a brilliant idea. And we had to make a reference to this piece of music.
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Beautiful look at a passionate relationship that fizzles, but ultimately leaves her (him?) stronger for the experience. The descriptions are wonderful, and I really enjoyed this. Great work!
Thank you so much Jeremy! 🙂
An interesting poem. I love the last stanza… I was not expecting that. Nice work integrating the prompt sentence, Suzanne, and thanks for letting me join your group.
Thank you Ted! And thanks for hanging out with us at the Speakeasy! 🙂
Love can be a ‘chilling’ experience…
Indeed it can. Thanks for reading Jacqueline.
Hi Suzanne, oh I’m joyous that I got to read another poem on Speakeasy!!! Writing in tercets is one of my favorite forms, This is a great piece and I really enjoyed the amount of skill in your slant rhymes, assonance, simile, and onomatopoeia shown here:
“I remember the dizzying buzz
Of being caught in your snowstorm
Like dancing light”
Thanks so much the wonderful read!
Aw, thank you so much Calamity! What a lovely comment. I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem. 🙂
Lovely, a beautiful expression of falling into your heart
Thank you so much Peggy! 🙂
I love this. The clear parallels between human experience and nature…let’s just say, I relate to this skillfully composed poem. 😉
You and me both sister! Thanks so much for your great comment! 🙂
I love how you broke up the prompt sentence. This is a beautifully written life cycle of a relationship – especially the emergence into freedom in the end 🙂
Thanks Janna! You gave us a great sentence to work with this week. 🙂
Suzanne, I really enjoyed the transformative nature of this poem. Beautiful.
Thank you so much Karen! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
Loved the last stanza the best. Poems are favourite of mine. They express more than mere words. 🙂
That’s one of things I love about poetry too. Thank you so much for your comment! 🙂
Very vivid – it packs a punch 🙂
Thank you! Glad to hear it. 🙂
Ooooh, an apostrophe 😀
(If it wasn’t for Trifecta I wouldn’t have known it’s other meaning :P)
This was a wonderful take on the prompt 🙂
That’s right! I didn’t even think of it. 🙂
Thanks so much for your comment!
This is a beautiful poem Suzanne!
Thank you Stacie! 🙂