Getting Over You

Old Broken Window

Getting Over You

I know you won’t see me anymore
And it hurts.
Next time will be different, I vow
As I fill the hole you left
Soothed by the thump, thump, thump of my shovel.


This is my submission for this week’s Trifecta writing challenge, in which they asked us for exactly 33 words about love gone wrong. And we were not allowed to use any of the following words:



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52 thoughts on “Getting Over You

  1. I get a sinister vibe from this-love can go wrong in many ways. The last line closes it brilliantly. Absolutely should be a top pick of the challenge. Great job and thank you for sharing this!

  2. I was all sad about the loss then you sucker punched me with the shovel thump. All that in 33 words….as always, amazing.

  3. I didn’t see the ending coming and I love that about this piece. I started out feeling the hurt and sadness of love lost and ended up feeling like I was watching the movie “Misery” or like I seen a Black Widow spider. Amazing!

  4. Love the double-meaning of the thumping, not to mention the twisted twist at the end. I wonder what grave mistake s/he made (sorry, I couldn’t resist a terrible pun)! Awesome work!

  5. I was so wrapped up in her palpable grief that I never saw the end coming. (The stiff probably didn’t, either–haha!) What a killer last line! 😉 The matter-of-fact tone made it even more chilling. I wonder how many of his/her relationships have ended this way. Excellent work!

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