Daylight creeps in
With long glowing fingers
Traces the contours of your face
And shines a light on my equivocation.

I float inside the silence that is poured
By these suspended moments
Trace the roads not taken
With weathered hands
And wonder.


Linking up with the summer series supergrid
over at yeah write. My piece is a 42-word
gargleblaster, inspired by this week’s optional
question prompt.


Image credit:  Lostinmymind89 deviantART

47 thoughts on “Troubled

  1. “trace the roads not taken”
    I fell in love with that line.

    (Which is a good way to start a Monday. 🙂 )

  2. “Daylight creeps in with long glowing fingers” is by far my favourite line! Is your protagonist a ghost coming back to see a loved one? Or did I read it completely wrong? Anyway, the quality of writing is superb. Congrats!

    1. Thanks for your great comment, DragonSpark! 🙂 While I really like your interpretation, when I wrote it I was thinking of someone reflecting on their relationship and whether they chose the right path.

  3. “…I float inside the silence that is poured
    By these suspended moments…” So life-like!

    “Trace the roads not taken…” that reminded me of “The Road Not Taken” by R. Frost.

    1. Thanks for your lovely comment! Yes, I was definitely paying homage to Frost when I chose that line. I’m glad you picked up on that. 🙂

  4. Haunting and beautiful.
    I also love the way your phrasing draws an “arrow” on the page. Makes me wonder what’s on that side of the directed sign. Is it pointing to Stay or Go? SO good!

  5. These early summer mornings can awake me from a dream state filled with questions and anxiety. Your piece captures that feeling.

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