Trifextra: Twist of Fate

Mermaid

Twist of Fate

She rescues the strangest two-legged creature from the waves.

Floundering prince of the land, adrift in her seas; she leads him ashore.

He opens his eyes and smiles, sealing her tragic fate.

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This is my submission for this weekend’s Trifextra challenge in which we had to write a complete story in exactly 33 words.

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Image credit: TIMURA / Photoxpress.com

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38 thoughts on “Trifextra: Twist of Fate

  1. “adrift in her seas”….ooh. Now there’s a phrase that’s just filled with metaphor. Lovely.
    And it is funny that we both went with mermaids this week. Maybe mermaids is a trend. The vampire trend’s probably tapped out by now…:)

    1. Thanks Michael! Maybe we’re the trend-setters? Vampires have had lots of time in the supernatural spotlight. Time to move over for mermaids. 🙂

  2. I just visited your Editors’ website, Suzanne. It explains much about you – and this blog! I can see a lot more in context now. Doh! My passions are similar since I started as a proofreader at the Melbourne Herald (Australia) way back before computers had even been invented. Must have been very late 60s and early 70s. And all that reading aloud led someone to siuggest I should get into radio. So I did and became a newsreader-journalist. Then I moved into print. Ah, but . . . too long a story. Still, don’t get me started on spellchecks!! Have a lovely day, mate. David.

    1. Thanks for commenting David! What an interesting life you’ve had! Have you written about it? I would love to know more, especially about your experience in radio. 🙂

  3. I love this Suzanne, and I can relate to the pain of her fate! I long to live near the ocean but right now I’m stuck in the desert-and so I ache for her heartache. Truly beautiful writing!

    1. Aw, thank you Valerie! I love the ocean too. I’m in Halifax, Nova Scotia right now (for an editing conference) and nothing beats the smell of the sea. 🙂

  4. Yes, I have written about it, Suzanne. In fact, I have ‘penned’ nine books over the past decade (80-120,000 words each). Actually, all of them in a six year period while working full-time. One was a texbook: “So, you want to be a professional communicator?” which detailed the lessons learned from the very diverse array of prof comm jobs I have held. One was an autobiography (isnlt that where most of us start?!) two were erotica, one literary fiction and the rest just pulp fiction. Never have taken them to a publisher or agent. Fear of rejection!!! So I’ll leave them to my sons (22 yo twins) who may, if they can be bothered do something with them once I’m gone. Essays have captured my interest currently but . . . Actually, I thought this weekend that . ‘decency’ should be the framework of my future writings. See how it goes! I have emerged from a period of depression after losing my job that dried-up my writing. I can geel it coming back though I am dreadfully busy at work. Who knows? Thank you, sincerely, for your interest. Oh, and I love radio and write for the ear now (alliteration and onomatopaeia drive me constantly). Have a lovely day, mate. David.

    1. More and more interesting David! Please tell your sons to let me know if they decide to publish your work! Writing for the ear is such a wonderful approach. After all, language is really meant to be shared, isn’t it?

  5. I love sharing the original, much darker, Little Mermaid with the kids at school. The discussions that arise from such a choice: would you kill the one you love to save yourself or would you kill yourself to save the one you love? The Disney version, much beloved as it is, looks incredibly lame in the eyes of the kids once they hear the real Little Mermaid. Thanks for your beautifully-written story. You are such a lovely wordsmith. 🙂

    1. Tom, I just have to say, you rock! I had a teacher who shared the original story with my class in Grade 4 and it made a lasting impression on me (as you can see!). So much so that I have never actually seen the Disney version. The original story is so beautiful and tragic. To give it a happy ending takes all the meaning out of it.

      Thank you so much for your lovely comment! 🙂

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