Break-in
The thief had barely left a trail. Rumpled sheets. A mug out of place.
Nevertheless, something was missing.
I searched for hours. Emptied drawers, peered under furniture, reached into the bowels of my couch. But my heart was nowhere to be found.
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This is my submission for this week’s gargleblaster challenge over at yeah write. The challenge poses a question and we have to answer it in exactly 42 words. Answers can be fiction, non-fiction, or poetry.
This week’s question is: Who dunnit?
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Image credit: KejaBlank @ deviantART
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“Bowels of my couch” is the perfect way to describe it!
I know, right? Scary place. 🙂
Ah, I really felt that one. The last line got me. It happens just like that sometimes.
Tell me about it! 🙂
Aw how sad
Maybe not – maybe the thief feels the same way… 🙂
I wish it was longer,i was finding it intriguing!
Thanks Ranu! 🙂
I went all “aww” at that end Suzanne!Such a romantic theft 😉 Brilliant ,as ever!
Aw, thanks Atreyee! 🙂
That last line really delivers a punch. You did a masterful job of conveying emotion and a story in very few words.
Aw, thank you so much! 🙂
You really packed a punch with this ditty. I love how it ended. I was expecting “peace of mind”.
Thanks Ann! Yeah, peace of mind would certainly be appropriate at my house! 😉
the hopeless romantic in me, just adored this.
the frenzied search for the parts of yourself that are gone once you meet someone who steals your heart .
WOW. Loved this one.
Aw, thank you so much Kir! This is what happened when I met my husband. 🙂
I love when something like this has a toe in reality. I love that back story. 🙂
Clever!
Thanks Obed! 🙂
Aww this was a wonderful write up…I couldn’t have guessed you were talking about the heart!
Random Thoughts Naba
Thanks Naba! I’m glad I kept you guessing. 🙂
AGH! That twist at the end! It got me.
Excellent! 🙂
That one hit home lol this was a really good one
Thank you so much! I’m really glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
Very nice. The least he could have done was rinse his mug in the sink.
Haha! True. Maybe a sign of things to come… 😉
What a great ending!
Thanks Jen! 🙂
This is the most vulnerable kind of theft – a TV can be replaced 🙂 Love the “bowels of the couch”… that’s one place I won’t go.
So true, Janna. And I’m with you regarding the couch – those crevices are scary! 🙂
I, too, love the bowels of the couch! And love the twist, didn’t see that coming! And then the rumpled sheets and mug out of place made sense! Wonderful post!
Thanks Madhura! I’m glad the sheets and the mug made sense once you got to the end – that’s what I was hoping. 🙂
Very clever. Love the way you set this up.
Thank you, Sarah Ann! 🙂
Thief is my all time favourite PC game – your pic is of Garrett the main character. For that alone I am liking this piece…that and it’s very good.
You’re the first one to point that out – bonus points for you! 🙂
Excellent!
Thank you! 🙂
Oo I love how the ‘rumpled sheets’ detail takes on a different meaning once you find out what was stolen! Very cool.
Thanks Kay! 🙂
Love the surprise ending. And the bowels of the couch…what a great image!
Thanks Sue! When you live with kids and animals, that’s exactly what the crevices of the couch become. 🙂
I hear you…living with kids means adventures around every corner—and in every crevice! 😉
Oh, gorgeous and romantic! I absolutely loved it.
Aw, thanks Christine! This was so much fun to write. 🙂
fantastic word choices, especially the final two lines.
Thanks Lance! 🙂
Last line- Oh my god! How perfect!!
~Shailaja
Aw, thanks Shailaja! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
This is great. Nice take.
Thank you!
I liked it and how you left the end strong yet open.
Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
Awww. I hope you let him read this!
I will when he gets back from his latest work trip. 🙂